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Hello there dearest capitan :) Thanks agian for inviting me to do another critique, it is quiet humbling.

I love your description of shot-glass poetry. Extermely creative and very you! I would've never in my wildest dreams imagined creating a new style of poetry, yet, here you have it. Brilliantly executed.

The spacin gbetween thte liens is pleasing to the eyes. HHowever I did not see very many sensory descriptions besides the pressing weight of silence. Sensory words are always a great way to spice up any poem (through sounds, smells, sights, and sounds of course).

The subject is once again something the audience can connect too. The insecurity in indiviguals, and the cage that we all seem to feel around us. And the mirror is always a safe route when creating images due to the fact that everyone has an image of the class mirror scene in their head since it is used in many great poems. I believe taht you could've used something more origional rather traditional. However, you made up for it (overly I might add) with making a new style of poetry.

I wonder if anyone has adopted your style yet?

I must say that the fact you have observed the decline in views during October is impressive. And then going the extra length to actually create a soluton for your quandry is even more so :) Well done once again!

Keep on writting and happy sailing.

May the odds be ever in your favor.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Professional Writer
I have read ye critique and will definitely try t' introduce more sensory words inta me poetry ^^

-Captain Chenbeard o' th' Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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